oPeople nowadays sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? What are the effects on individuals and people around them?

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to earn money rather than to have
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abundant sleep in the 21st century compared to the past.
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essay analyses why
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a
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good sleep is required in life to succeed than having short
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happiness.
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with, it could be argued that for a better lifestyle and to get socially connected you need to spend more and more of your precious
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, living creatures
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planet has started working beyond their given
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just to earn some handsome amount of penny.
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number of youth their most of
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time
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social media just to check each other’s
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in their life which causes sleepless
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.
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a recent statistical report by Cambridge
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on
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cycle of humans indicates that after vast development of social media and its feature
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encourage
people
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to spare more
time
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on it which is the only reason for cutting down the sleep. Having said that,
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individuals in their daily routine
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different ways
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the first and foremost is sleep. If
,
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a person doesn’t take enough rest within a day
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it might be a downfall in their present career
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in future. Alongside,
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subsides creativity which is truly essential for their career ladder.
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, sleepless
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effects
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tiredness and aggressive
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towards other
people
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around us. In fact, we can’t spend some
time
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with our family members
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hectic schedules or surfing social media which generates
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between them.
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article by
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time
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of Canada states that
people
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less sleep are barely successful in their life
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compared to one
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takes sufficient sleep.
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, it is highly recommended to take
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amount of sleep for their betterment rather than working more for just some cents which results in declining
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creativity, concentration and many more.
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