oPeople nowadays sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? What are the effects on individuals and people around them?
In
this
contemporary world, people
have choose
to earn money rather than to have Change the form of the verb
chosen
an
abundant sleep in the 21st century compared to the past. Correct article usage
apply
This
essay analyses why Add the particle
to have
have
Wrong verb form
having
a
good sleep is required in life to succeed than having short Correct article usage
apply
tern
happiness.
Correct your spelling
term
To begin
with, it could be argued that for a better lifestyle and to get socially connected you need to spend more and more of your precious time
. In other word
, living creatures Change the wording
another word
other words
upon
Change preposition
on
this
planet has started working beyond their given time
just to earn some handsome amount of penny. Moreover
, huge
number of youth their most of Change the article
a huge
the huge
the
Change the word
their
time
in
social media just to check each other’s Change preposition
on
day to day
Add a hyphen
day-to-day
update
in their life which causes sleepless Fix the agreement mistake
updates
night
. Fix the agreement mistake
nights
For instance
, in
a recent statistical report by Cambridge Change preposition
apply
university
on Correct your spelling
University
sleeping
cycle of humans indicates that after vast development of social media and its feature Correct article usage
the sleeping
which
encourage Correct pronoun usage
apply
people
to spare more time
on it which is the only reason for cutting down the sleep.
Having said that, this
could effect
individuals in their daily routine Correct your spelling
affect
by
different ways Change preposition
in
like
the first and foremost is sleep. IfChange preposition
apply
,
a person doesn’t take enough rest within a day Remove the comma
apply
then
it might be a downfall in their present career as well as
in future. Alongside, this
also
subsides creativity which is truly essential for their career ladder. Additionally
, sleepless nights’
effects Change noun form
nights
in
tiredness and aggressive Change preposition
apply
behavior
towards other Change the spelling
behaviour
people
around us. In fact, we can’t spend some time
with our family members due to
hectic schedules or surfing social media which generates gap
between them. Add an article
a gap
This
could be exemplified by latest
article by Correct article usage
the latest
Add an article
the time
time
of Canada states that Correct your spelling
Time
people
who takes
less sleep are barely successful in their life Change the verb form
take
than
compared to one Change preposition
apply
which
takes sufficient sleep.
Correct pronoun usage
who
To conclude
, it is highly recommended to take adequate
amount of sleep for their betterment rather than working more for just some cents which results in declining Correct article usage
an adequate
of
creativity, concentration and many more.Change preposition
in
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