The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.
The graph below shows us female year ,Scotland showed
unemployment
rates in the four countries
of the UK.
There are downward trends in three countries
except
Scotland,including Add the preposition
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highest
point in Add an article
the highest
the
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England
.
As regards the first,in England
we can see some decrease in unemployment
. In 2013 country faced 6.8% of
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unemployment
which was a
highest Correct article usage
the
from
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of
each
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all
countries
. However
,after a year, England
slightly improved their statistic
by 0.3% making it second Fix the agreement mistake
its statistics
from
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among
four
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the four
countries
. By contrast
,Wales was lowest
country Change the article
the lowest
by
2013 with Change preposition
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a
5.4%. In 2014 Correct article usage
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unemployment
rate was
declined by 5.0%.
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, there are two Correct word choice
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countries
that nearly have same
trends Correct article usage
the same
like
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as
England
and Wales. Scotland had a 6.1% of unemployment
by 2013,whether
Northern Ireland had a 5.6%. OverCorrect word choice
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the
a
highest
rate Change the article
the highest
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6.7% which was nearly as Change preposition
at
many
as Correct quantifier usage
much
England
’s 2013 trend.Meanwhile ,Northern Ireland steadily deteriorated to 4.6%, 1% less than previous
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