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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller building. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

These days, we can easily find taller buildings which are called
apartments
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.
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, we see some houses between height buildings.
According to
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people
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's preferences and
decresed
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decreased
 populations, housing will be more appropriate in the changes of society.
To begin
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 with
apartments
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,
for example
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 in Korea,
a
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the
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 land is too small to live many populations, so to utilize
lands
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land
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 properly, there are many tall buildings
expecially
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especially
 in
cities
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the cities
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 of Korea, Seoul. In the
apartments
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, not only many
people
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 can live but
also
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people
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 can use small lands more effectively. In recent
apartments
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, there are community facilities
such
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 as swimming
pool
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pools
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, playgrounds and gyms.
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, security services are well.
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 of these advantages, nowadays,
people
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 think that private is the most important factor.
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, in the
apartments
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, it is hard to live in private and sometimes the
noisy
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noise
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 from other floors can cause crimes between
neighbors
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neighbours
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.
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, house with a large area,
people
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 can use it privately. They can decorate their spaces what they want to.
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, through big gardens or spaces, they can feel
relax
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 rather than in the apartment.
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,
people
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 do not need to care
of
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about
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 making noise. So, if there are children, they can run or do activities freely in their homes.
Although
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 there are many advantages, there are
also
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 disadvantages
such
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 as
lack
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a lack
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 of
security
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a security
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 system or
less
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fewer
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 opportunities
of
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for
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 connection between
neighborhoods
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neighbourhoods
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. But,
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 pros can overcome cons. In conclusion, there is a consideration
between
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about
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 which is better,
apartments
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 or houses. There are many views of
benefits
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the benefits
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 and non-benefits of both ones.
According to
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 decreasing population and increasing
on
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apply
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the
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apply
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importance of privacy, I think houses are a
more
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apply
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better solution
to
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for
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 society.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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