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Although more and more people read newspapers on the internet, newspaper will remain as the most important source of news. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #newspapers #internet #newspaper #source #news
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 on to
internet
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the internet
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 and
read
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 the papers online, newspapers will be more essential for
population
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the population
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 to be informed
from
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about
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news
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the news
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. I agree with
this
 opinion and think
this
 kind of way is valuable for them.
Firstly
, we do not know
all
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if all
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 of the messages on
the
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social network are reliable, as some of them have the author, but much more of them were probably written on purpose to arise panic or
to
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shock.
In contrast
 to
this
, the information
on
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in
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newspaper
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the newspaper
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, no doubt, has
source
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a source
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 and it is checked by
editor-in-chief
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the editor-in-chief
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.
For instance
, a lot of publishing houses are popular in our country
such
 as ,
,
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Namangan
haqiqati
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''. Because it is safe
likewise
 the news on TV or radio.
Secondly
, when we log on to
internet
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the internet
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 for hours
in addition
 to
see
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seeing
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 papers, it may damage our eyes.
On the contrary
,
paper
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the paper
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 version is made from
the
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a
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 product which does not get tired eyes, it is one of the
most handy
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side
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 of
this
. Namely, some adults
such
 as our grandparents are possibly unable to read
the
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sentences on
the
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mobile phones,
however
, they are interested in social media and they can read
it
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them
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 easily
at
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on
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the
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paper.
Therefore
, they prefer
to
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it.
On the other hand
, some people like the speed of social
network
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networks
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due to
 newspaper
delivering
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is
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being
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 more slowly than
it
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others
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.
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is.
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 But in my view, it is good
that
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to take true data. In conclusion, I believe that reading newspapers will be more comfortable and useful to our health than
to read
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reading
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it
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them
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 online.
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