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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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The column graphs illustrate the destinations of UK
graduate
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 and postgraduate
students
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 who did not go into full-tim3
work
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 after leaving college in 2008. It can be clearly seen that the number of
graduate
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students
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 that has been investigated in
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are
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 ten times more than postgraduates. As is presented, the number of
unemployment
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 in both charts is approximately the same in their own scales.
About
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 part-time
work
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, it can be said that 17,735 people of
graduate
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 and 2,535 persons of postgraduate
students
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 had chosen that.Oppositely the
students
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 who did voluntary
work
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 stand
on
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at
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bottom
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 of the list respectively (3,500 and 345).
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 but not least,the figure of
students
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 who wanted to continue their
study
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studies
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 has experienced a sharp rise. In a word, the
students
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of
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with
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graduate
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 and postgraduate
rating
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ratings
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 had nearly similar selections to
work
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 after leaving university in 2008.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduate, students, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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