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The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.

The maps below show the changes in a town after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam.
#maps #show #changes #town #construction #power #dam
These two maps of
town
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the town
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gives
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give
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informations
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information
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 of changing from 1990 to 2010. There can be seen many changes
on
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in
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 a
town
. Before construction, in 1990, there was a
river
 in the
center
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centre
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 of
town
 and from
west
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the west
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, there
were
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was
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 a forest,
a
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an
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 ancient structure with some plants and animals. On the right side of
river
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the river
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, there were farmlands and small villages. From
map
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the map
a map
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 of 1990, we could know
a
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an
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eco-firendly
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eco-friendly
 and ancient environment. After construction, in 2010, in the north of
map
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the map
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,
lake
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a lake
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 and some
mountins
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mountains
 were made and on the east side, a hotel was built. On the bottom of
map
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the map
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, there was a
strill
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still
river
 but, on the west and the east of
river
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the river
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, there were some new
electricities
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electricity
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 and on the north side of
river
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the river
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, there was a
hydroelectronic
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hydroelectric
 dam.
Overall
, through a decade,
town
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the town
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 changed in
mordern
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modern
 than before.
Also
,
town
 construction got rid of
a
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an
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 ancient
building
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buildings
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 and some
natures
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nature
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 and
lives
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life
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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