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Some people think governments are responsible for peoples health, others believe its an indiviuduals responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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One
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 of the social concerns today relates to
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.
While
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 it is commonly suggested that
governments
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 are responsible for
people
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’s
health
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, others believe its an individual’s responsibility. In my opinion, the
health
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 is very important and no everything can replace. On the
one
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 hand, it is argued by some that
people
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 need protection about
health
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 for
governments
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.
Firstly
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,
people
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 must pay money for
governments
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 every month.
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 good illustration of
this
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 is
governments
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 have update about facility
such
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 as: the park, supermarket, the places help
people
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 feel ralax,...
Secondly
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, only
governments
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 can be decice promulgate law.
For example
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, when
people
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 want to build sports yard
then
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 they must be allow of
governments
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.
On the other hand
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, it is strongly believed by others that each
people
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 must take care of in my body.
People
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 often have
this
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 opinion because each
people
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 have life difference so no
one
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 could responsible to protect
health
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 of self. A particularly good example here is we can be take care of yourself by eat, drink, do exercise,… every day I always eat very much but important it is good for my body, I alway set time for me to do exercise every week
such
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 as: boxing, play soccer, swimming, go to walk,… because it help me update my body as my life will happy and healthy better. In conclusion,
governments
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 are responsible for
people
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’s
health
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, others believe its an individual’s responsibility. Personally, I tend to believe that we can understand role important of
health
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, how is it? And we will know to protect it.
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