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Some business now say that no one can smoke cigarettes in their offices. Some government have banned smoking in public plces. Overall this is a very good idea. To what extent do you agree

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A few business institutes now started to change their rules and regulation so that no
one
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 can smoke
cigarettes
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 or any other tobacco in their offices
as well as
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 the
government
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also
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 have banned smoking and alcohol in public areas. I agree with
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 statement because smoking can be dangerous for human health. These days, many organizations have put restrictions on smoking for the betterment of a
person
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's future and environment
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, if a
person
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 quit smoking
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 he can save himself from cancer problems.
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, the smoke of
cigarettes
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 can hurt air pollution and
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 be harmful to the environment so if the public stop
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 kind of activity
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 the world can prevent the effect of global warming.
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, the
government
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 put banned smoking in public places to save
person
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's life and air pollution. If
people
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 can start smoking in public places
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 others can
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 encourage.
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, school children can be inspired by others to take uncertain things.
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, the smell of smoke can harm normal
people
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 rather than consumers.
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, the
government
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 always takes care of
people
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 so banning and high punishment for consuming
cigarettes
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 are paramount to save
people
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 from wrong wabanningBesides, the positive side is there's
one
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 drawbacK a
person
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 can not change his addiction in
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 day.
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, if a boy has had a habit of
cigarettes
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 forthere'spthe past 5 years
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 he can not cha the drawback that
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 day and there is a high chance of loose his temper or mental health.
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, banned of
cigarettes
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 everywhere is a good decision by THE
government
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 and privatinstitutionsinstitutions
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 way we can keep our environment less polluted.

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