The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 2000.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 2000.
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The pie chart illustrates the major concerns
why
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about why
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agricultural
land
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is used less in people's lives. The table provides
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information on the influence of these facts on three regions during 2000. As can be seen from the table, it gives the data about three countries, namely Africa, Asia and South America and the impact of overgrazing, deforestation and total
land
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degradation is shown in percentages. Looking at the pie chart, it could be highlighted that overgrazing is the main factor why agricultural
land
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becomes less useful. Looking at the details, it can be mentioned that deforestation affected South America the most and Africa the least, 10.5% and 1.8% respectively. Asia's
land
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is impacted by total
land
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degradation the most, 23%,
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Africa is by 7 per cent and South America
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by 12.3%. It is clear from the pie chart that
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cause are fourfold less influence on agricultural
land
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than over-cultivation does.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words land with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Agricultural productivity
  • Deforestation
  • Over-cultivation
  • Overgrazing
  • Soil erosion
  • Nutrient depletion
  • Land degradation
  • Soil compaction
  • Fertility
  • Preventive measures
  • Sustainable farming practices
  • Environmental impact
  • Economic implications
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