It is important for people to take risk, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking a risk out with the disadvantages?

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plays
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essential
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in
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both professional and private
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. In my opinion, there are several benefits
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taking
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risk
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rather than
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drawbacks if
people
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thinking
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deeply before
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a
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, taking
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risk
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is
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conducive
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to real opportunities. If
people
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leave their comfort zone and think
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carefully
about all
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of the
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, they will have a chance to live
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experience
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experiences
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, when
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who live in developing countries decide to migrate to developed nations ,
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they accept living far away from their family and friends and start to make their
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life
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from the beginning they would have better job
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opportunities
and higher
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income
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consequence
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they probably have a better
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.
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, unless taking
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people
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will never know their capabilities ,because they face
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compeletly diffrent
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completely different
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situations
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that they may find out how to deal with and use their
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inherent
talents to overcome them.
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, taking
risks
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is
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essential part of success. A person who takes a
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not only breaks his monotonous lifestyle
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but
also
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widen his horizon and personal prospect which lead to
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his goals.
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Moreover
, if
people
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take a
risk
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and reach their aims , they will have higher
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result
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they embrace adventure and take more
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which make them
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successful
in their professional
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as well as
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personal
life
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To
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the
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nutshell, the advantages of
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putting
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uncertainly
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zone outweigh its demerits. It gives
people
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selfconfidence
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self-confidence
self confidence
,
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proven
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success and great
oppurtunities
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opportunities
in their
lifes
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lives
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and assist
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them to live their goals and reach their dreams.
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