there seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent many people believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both the sides.

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desist from behaving unlawful manner. Alongside

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should never ever get bail from

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retribution.

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recidivism rates
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