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You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarkets. write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter : -say who you are -give details about the accident. -suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents

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Dear Sir or Madam My name is SABER Youcef, I reside on 11th Street, two blocks away from your store, I shop frequently from your supermarket and I have been a regular customer for over 5 years. I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction with your services, yesterday when I was doing my regular shopping I noticed that I have not purchased milk yet;
therefore
, I went to the diary section and suddenly a bottle of yoghurt fell from the shelve and hit directly my feet,
as a result
, I had to go to the hospital for a diagnosis, the results showed that I almost broke my toe. I have a suggestion to make in order to prevent
such
 accidents in the future, first of all, your employees have to assure that the goods are well put in their places on shelves,
secondly
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 your staff has to observe regularly and make an intervention in case it is necessary. I would appreciate your immediate attention to
this
 matter Yours faithfully SABER Youcef
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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