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,as computer being use more and more for education ,there are will be soon no role for teacher in the class room

#computer #education #role #teacher #class #room
Computer technology is every day updating new things globally,During covid 19 time all
students
 studied from distance learning from their homes. most
students
 start their educational program the computers which
means
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 people can study on the computer without a team , ,
Also
 some
students
 are following international courses from their countries because of new technologies .any how some
students
 are more updated about the computer knowledge compare with other
students
 and they think they can anything studies through the computers without
teachers
 in the classroom. ,
,
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However
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students
 are necessary to physically contract with
teachers
 and under
teachers
' observation doing their studies because they need guidelines and feedback on their progress . ,
moreover
presence
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 of
teachers
 is very important not in the study as well make a
student
 disciplined,it is essential to the development of
student's
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 personality .,
Also
teachers
 can easily identify with
students
'
week's
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 points and give them
advise
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 and
increasing
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 to
students
' morale, it is very successful.The American university make
a
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researchers
to
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self-studies with computers and educational programs by
teachers
 ,they have taken around five hundred
students
 for the above research and it results in more successful
students
 in the classroom study
students
 by
teachers
 In my opinion
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technology helps the
student
 but the teacher's role is essential to
success
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the success
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student
's carrier
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