Write a letter to the television channel Manager about boring programs during the day time. Tell him about the programs, give suggestions.

Dear Sir, I am writing
this
letter to express my dissatisfaction with the television shows aired during the day hours on your
channel
StarPlus. I am a prime subscriber to the
channel
,
however
, I am very disappointed by the dry shows available to watch. The programs usually telecasted between 11am to 4 pm on StartPlus are mostly cooking shows and overly dramatic soap operas. These shows are repeated over and over, and
hence
, it is extremely boring for the audience to stay on the
channel
.
This
is the time of the day when children like to enjoy television time after coming back from school,
however
, neither the parents,
not
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the kids want to watch them. I would highly recommend
to consider
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airing
travel related
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shows, and programs that impart knowledge to young ones,
such
as documentaries from
animal
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planet. As the cricket World Cup season is around the corner, you could
also
schedule
the
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cricket matches
which
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that
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the families can enjoy together. Hope these suggestions would help you bring
in
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more interesting content
on
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to
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your
channel
. Yours faithfully Apoorva Badola
Submitted by apoorva.badola on

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