Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading causes of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 to drive motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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growth from the
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China
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2000
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starts from 1,250(
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year
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2000.
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population
dramatically increased from 1,000(billion)
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1,600(
billions
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) from the
year
2,000 to the
year
2050.
China
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population
and
India
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population
of 1,450 (
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)
point
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meet in the
year
2033.
Although
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population
is significantly higher than
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in
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the beginning after the
population
peak at 1,450(
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billion
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) it gradually falls to 1,390 (
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billion
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)in
year
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2050. To be summarized
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populations
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population
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are increasing to 1,600 (
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50 years,
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population
stable
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and
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between1,400
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between 1,400
(
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) and 1,500 (
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) from the years 2018 to the
year
2050. There has been
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decrease after the
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2050. even though
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initially
the
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compared to
India
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • road safety
  • traffic fatalities
  • risk perception
  • graduated licensing
  • enforceable legislation
  • statistical correlation
  • demographic analysis
  • adolescent development
  • age discrimination
  • public transportation
  • driving prohibition
  • legal restrictions
  • vehicular accidents
  • rash driving
  • defensive driving
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