Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe the daily

use

of

computers

has positive effects on

children

,

while

others disagree about that. In my

opinion

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there

is

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much

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many

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more negative effects,

this

is

due to

the fact that they will spend too much

time

playing games and

this

may

leads

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on

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health

problems

.

Although

computers

could be a really good tool,

such

as searching for information, it is

also

used for

children

to play different

computer

games, spending the whole day isolated

instead

of socialising with friends and relatives, leading

on

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a lack of communication skills.

Moreover

spending too much

time

using the

computer

makes them not have enough

time

to study and fulfil

homeworks

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homework

from school.

For instance

, my cousin has really bad marks at high school, that happens because he always prefers to play

computer

games rather than study.

On the other hand

, the excessive

use

of

computers

can lead to different health

problems

.

This

definitely causes on

children

by eye fatigue and really strong headaches. Doctors prove after an exhaustive year of examinations that one of the reasons why

children

need glasses is

due to

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the excessive

use

of

computers

. A good example of

this

is the famous singer, Lola Palo. She told in a tv program that her vision

problems

started when she was a child and

use

to spend long nights on the

computer

.

Moreover

, not only can cause vision

problems

and headaches but

also

it is really hard to keep the right posture

while

we are seating using the

computer

.

To conclude

, even though the

computer

could be something really useful for

children

, they should take to do not spend too much

time

using it every day so they can avoid communication and health

problems

, and by the

way

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achieve

a

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better performance at school. Balance is really important in life.