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Today, some people think that universities should accept equal numbers of female and male in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #universities #numbers #policy
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The graph represents
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 growth from the
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 2000 to the
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 2050 in
India
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 and
China
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. Based on the graph
India
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's
population
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 starts from 1,000(
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) in the
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 2000
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China
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population
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 starts from 1,250(
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 2000.
India
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population
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 dramatically increased from 1,000(
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 2,000 to the
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 2050.
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's
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's
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 of 1,450 (
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 2033.
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's at the beginning after the
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 the peak at 1,450(
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 2050. To be summarized
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 are increasing to 1,600 (
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 and maintain between1,400 (
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 2050. There has been a
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 2050. even though
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 the
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 the
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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