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Some people think the government should subsidize fruit and vegetables to make healthy food more affordable. Other argue that the government should tax unhealthy food instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In the modern world, someone believes that the
government
 should pay for fruit and vegetables to help
people
 to buy them.
In contrast
, someone believes that the
government
 should
tax
 junk
food
. In my opinion, I believe that the
government
 must pay for good
food
 and
tax
 on bad
food
 are very good
ideas
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the benefits of both
ideas
. First of all, the
government
 must
support
people
 in their country with their
food
 because they need to have good
food
 that good
food
 can make them have a good life ,
for example
, in my ,country the
government
 always
support
people
 with
food
such
 as milk for students in schools. And the
government
 always
support
 money for
people
 who have low income every month.
Secondly
, a high
tax
 on unhealthy is a very positive idea because the idea can make many
people
 not want to buy them and
food
 businesses not want to sell them.
On the other hand
, most
people
 usually believe that the
ideas
 of paying for good
food
 and
tax
 on junk
food
 are normal
ideas
 because some
people
 still buy the
food
 they want. And the best idea is to give knowledge to them
Add the comma(s)
, for example,
show examples
for example
 school can teach students about healthy and unhealthy
food
.
To sum up
, I totally agree that the
government
 should
support
 healthy
food
 and anti-unhealthy
food
 so that they can get high taxes on junk
food
.
In addition
, another way is to give them knowledge about
food
 that can help
people
 have a good life.
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