The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should realise this. To what extent do you agree?

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Health is one

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important aspects of life that cannot be ignored.Prevention is better than cure as the saying goes is true since time. It is the responsibility of the state to invest in

such

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measures rather than

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medicines. There are many diseases that can be prevented by taking certain precautions.

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with,the deadly disease malaria has been

enormolusly

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enormously

increasing in many societies and individuals have to spend huge amounts in paying

the

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apply

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hospital bills.

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,the government should prevent the stagnant water from entering the houses as malaria is a water

brone

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borne

disease and keeping the water fresh it reduces the burden on the

people

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,certain skin conditions like

Ezcema

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Eczema

and skin rashes are caused

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not being clean and

hygenic

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hygienic

.Individuals should try to

bath

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daily and keep themselves in good condition by using moisturisers.

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to the

above mentioned

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reasons

government

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can conduct camps and educate

people

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about healthy habits to

adapt

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adopt

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in their daily life which will not only lessen their burden on spending money on drugs

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also

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on expensive procedures.

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rise in

number

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a number

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of cancer patients every year especially oral cancers

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smoking

have

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caused low socio-economic

people

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to spend their wages on treatment.

State

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should impose

ban

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a ban

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on these tobacco products which will help decrease the cancer rate.

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,it has been reported there is a decline of about 50

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in cancer rate after the stoppage of tobacco in urban and rural areas.

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,Government should spend its revenue on health education and help prevent certain diseases which will not only benefit the

people

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financially but

also

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mentally.

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Overall Band Score

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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265 words

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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine. Government funding should realise this. To what extent do you agree?

Your opinion

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Some people believe the purpose of education is to prepare individuals to be beneficial to society. Others say the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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