How should we ensure that television is a positive influence in the life of children?

Television
is a part of
everydays
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everyday
life
and most
children
watch programs regularly. Many people agree that
children
if
they
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apply
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watch
much
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a lot of
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television
it can have
determental
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detrimental
effects on
children
, especially their eyes.
Moreover
, we should control the way
children
watch
TV
to make sure it is not
harming
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. I introduce two
measurments
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measurements
measures
to ensure that
television
has
positive
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a positive
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influence
in
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the
life
of
children
.
Firstly
, parents should have
a
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apply
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control
on
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over
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the type of
programmes
that
children
watch.
In addition
, they should warrant
that
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which program is appropriate for their child.
For example
, there are many cartoons which
is
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are
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educational and
also
work as a huge box of information and words for
children
that can be beneficial for their
life
.
Secondly
,
TV
companies should set
a
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appropriate time for playing horror movies.
For example
, there should be some protection so that during the afternoon and the evening only suitable
programmes
are available.
This
is another protection for the
childrens
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children
children's
life
.
Furthermore
, it is important to set a limitation for the amount of time spent watching
television
. If
children
spend too much time in front of the
TV
, it can be harmful
for
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their physical and mental health.
TV
should be part of a whole range of activities for
children
. If
children
do sports, have other hobbies and go out with their friends
then
TV
is a nice relaxing activity for them. It can be a positive influence.
Finally
,
TV
can be great in
help
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children
to make friends because most kids watch
television
which
give
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gives
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them something to talk about. If they have
a
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the
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same taste in cartoons or
children
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children's
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programmes
, they will be able to discuss it and find something in common. To sum,
television
can be a very positive influence
for
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children
. If parents control
duration
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the duration
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of the
childrens
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children
children's
watch and the type of
programmes
, it can be a good part of their lives.
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