International tourism has brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment.

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Nowadays, international
tourism
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has become more famous for all countries in the world because it brings many advantages, but for all pros, there are cons following, and I will give the reasons in
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essay. Many countries, including Indonesia, are developing their
tourism
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massively. Social media is key that Indonesia can show the best places to visit
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as Bali, Raja Ampat, and Nusa Tenggara Timur. The benefits are government, and local
people
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get income from it. For illustrate, government get income from Visa, and local
people
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get money from renting their house to tourist or selling food. Many jobs are created in the
tourism
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business.
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, becoming famous is not always good. From what I see, many places are damaged because of
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of new buildings
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as hotels and resorts.
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, local inhabitants that live in one place for hundred years ago will disappear because of greedy
people
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, their homes and land will
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by international investors and they will move from their ancestor land. The
people
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want all benefits and forget that their start to damage the environment. For illustrate, a turtle that lay
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its
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eggs on
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spesific
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beach for hundreds of years is threatened by hotel construction close to its beach.
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,
people
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in Indonesia are not good to manage their trash and it will become
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a new
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problem for
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the environment
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.
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, I agree that global
tourism
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has many advantages for humans but we can not forget that we live on earth and we
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place
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a place
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with other living things. If the government can make good regulations on how to run
tourism
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correctly, it will benefit can make good regulations on how to run
tourism
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in the right way, it will have benefits for us and other living things.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enormous benefit
  • impact
  • local inhabitants
  • environment
  • disadvantages
  • outweigh
  • advantages
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • cultural exchange
  • infrastructure development
  • promotion
  • local products
  • environmental impact
  • exploitation
  • resources
  • cultural erosion
  • increased cost of living
  • overcrowding
  • congestion
  • balancing
  • benefits
  • disadvantages
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