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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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In
this
 contemporary world, globalization has become a common phenomenon, and more
people
 start to learn a foreign
language
. Some
people
 believe the only reason for learning a foreign
language
 is in order to travel to or work abroad,
while
 others oppose it. In my opinion,
Although
 going abroad for some purposes is the main reason to study a foreign
language
, there are some other reasons worth learning it.
To begin
 with, the most common use to learn a new
language
 is to communicate with foreigners when going abroad,
otherwise
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 it is not essential in
people
's lives. Because all the things related to abroad in our life have
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to
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 native
language
 for convenience.
For example
, those popular foreign movies are normally accompanied
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 native
language
 subtitles,
imported
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 goods will have instruction in
native
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language
.
Therefore
,
people
 living in their native countries rarely need to use foreign
languages
.
However
, here are some other reasons for learning new
languages
.
Firstly
, mastering a foreign
language
 is able to enhance one's career competition.
Along with
 the global transaction growth rapidly,
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 of subordinates of international firms have been set over the country. These foreign companies need a large number of bilingual professionals,
thus
, those
people
 who can speak foreign
languages
 will have more job opportunities than others.
Moreover
, learning a foreign
language
 can broaden the horizon, every
language
 has a unique culture, and
people
 are able to increase their knowledge when learning a foreign
language
.
For instance
, the pronunciation of some Mahjong terms in Japanese is similar to a vernacular from southeastern China, which means the game of Mahjong was transmitted from these regions to Japan in the past. It is very interesting to find cultural relationships between two countries by learning a
language
. In conclusion,
while
 the main purposes for learning foreign
languages
 are to go to work or travel abroad, expanding the scope of knowledge and becoming more competitive in the workplace are two other reasons to learn foreign
languages
.
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  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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