You have seen an advertisement in Australian magazines for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child write a letter # Explain why you would like this # Give detail of why you are a suitable person to employ # Say how would you spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir and Madam, I am Ella Khin from Yangon, Myanmar. I am writing to express my interest to apply

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job announcement which you published in an Australian magazine about the need to have a caregiver for your child for

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great opportunity that I would like to widen my horizon since I enjoy travelling to new places and

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different cultures and people around the world.

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, Australia is one of the countries that I

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my dream bucket list. For the eligibility of the position, I believe I have a good experience with kids because I volunteered as a teacher for one year at

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non-profit nursery school during my university gap year.

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, I am currently studying at the faculty of psychology that I possess a deep understanding of

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natures and behaviors.

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, during my spare time, I would like to go around Australia to visit famous attractions

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as beaches, deserts and wildlife centuries.

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, I will make new friends to expand my social connection. Please do not hesitate to contact me if you have

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questions. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Ella Khin

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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