The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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of different modes of transport in 1990 and after 20 years.

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the two different modes of

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time, the index became three times higher. The second increased

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and through the decades decreased twice. The most lower index

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2010 was cycling and walking and bus,

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through the two decades, dramatically decrease

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type of travelling to and from

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school. And through the innovation, the most usable method became

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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