The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates
pupils
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pupils'
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travel
types to and from the school.
Moreover
, she
is
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clearly
show
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shows
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the changes
among
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usage
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the usage
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of different modes of transport in 1990 and after 20 years.
According to
the bar chart, we see, that the biggest changes were
at
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the two different modes of
travel
.
First
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type is
vehicle
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a vehicle
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, at the beginning usage amounts
only
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millions
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to millions
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per year, but
since
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the
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time, the index became three times higher. The second increased
trips
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rate was walking, which
is
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was about twelve
millions
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million
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and through the decades decreased twice. The most lower index
at
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2010 was cycling and walking and bus,
that is
also
decreased rates since 1990. We can see that almost stable remain the bus
travel
type. All in all, we can obviously see
than
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through the two decades, dramatically decrease
active
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type of travelling to and from
the
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school. And through the innovation, the most usable method became
travel
by car.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trips
  • children
  • modes of transport
  • walk
  • cycle
  • public transport
  • drive
  • car
  • trends
  • decrease
  • increase
  • shift
  • convenient
  • comfortable
  • commuting
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • significant
  • indicate
  • reasons
  • traffic congestion
  • safety concerns
  • 20-year period
  • doubled
  • considerable margin
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