You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter: •correct the information in the article • explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information • suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a regular reader of your magazine that I would like to draw your attention regarding some incorrect data in your recent publication on 2nd April about one of our local festivals, Thingyan. In the article, the writer described the duration of Thingyan

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from 13th April to 17th April for 5 days. I am afraid that there is misinformation in the facts. We usually celebrate Thingyan by throwing water

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other only for

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of 4 days which we called A Kyo, A Kya, A Kyat and A Tat.

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, we regard the fifth day as the very first day of another new year for Myanmar that we do good deeds and donations. Your magazine is considered to be a very reliable source of information that many people including me trust all the details provided when travelling.

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, it is very important to make sure that all the ideas and particulars published

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accurate. If I may suggest some corrective action, please arrange to have a proofreading team

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check the facts before disclosure.

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, corrected information should be mentioned in your next month’s edition

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apology remarks. Looking forward

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prompt response and wish you all the success. Yours Faithfully, Ella Khin

shooneaindraykhinTue Apr 25 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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