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We are becomimg increasingly dependent on computer technology. It is used in business, crime detection and even to fly planes. What will it be used for in future? Is this dependence on technology a good thing or should we be suspicious of its benefits?

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Computer
technology
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 is used in various industries
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 as business, crime detection, and flying planes, expressing that
people
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 increasingly rely on it. In my opinion,
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 phenomenon provides many benefits for developing more in our world and it will be used for applying
humans
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 in
future
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. A
human robot
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human-robot
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 is our
future
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 that will be developed by artificial intelligence knowledge, one part of computer
technology
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. Even though, nowadays,
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 is a developing process that still lacks some functions and doesn’t seem completely like real
humans
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, it is what the
future
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 world needs since robots can be fixed, controlled, and used
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 of
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 for risky work or decreasing hiring costs in companies.
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 of
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 innovation, it will revolutionize many business lines especially jobs that affect health and life,
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 robots can work the kind of dangerous tasks that
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 should not do,
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 as firefighter, rescue workers, and confined space workers.
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 some
people
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 said dependence on
technology
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 has some negative things, its benefits outweigh the disadvantages. Presently,
people
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 can live better and easier than in the past because
technology
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 is advanced and expanded to every place around the world.
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, better health care equipment provides doctors help more patients accurately, machines affect low hiring costs,
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 easier communication between other countries. In conclusion, computer
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 gives
people
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 many advantages,
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 as working
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 of
humans
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 for dangerous tasks, low hiring costs,
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 better health care tools.
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, it will be used for human robots that can work
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 and efficiently as real
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 in the
future
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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