In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge orr experience.

It is often perceived that the older generation most likely
spend
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their time in a nursing
house
.
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,
in
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some
occassion
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occasion
occasions
,
government
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the government
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allocated their capital for
this
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these
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services.
This
essay will explain why
family
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families
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need to be responsible in taking
care
of the elderly, including to finance the nursing
house
. On
one
hand
, the elderly
contributes
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the least
for
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the
goverment
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government
because they are already unproductive, making it difficult to prioritize the budget for
this
generation. It
it
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worth considering that
government
obtain
the
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money
from their citizens through
tax
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system, which required them to pay
the
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annual tax
according to
their
wealths
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wealth
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and
incomes
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income
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.
This
is important because
the
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money
has become sensitive
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as societies will try to scrutinize how
government
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the government
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allocated the budget. Alternatively, the
money
could be used for addressing more urgent cases
such
as giving
aids
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aid
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to the poor, building
school
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schools
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in remote areas, and providing access to clean water in underdeveloped regions.
Consequently
,
due to
limited source,
government
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the government
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unable
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to provide help for the elderly as the
money
would be better off in the
hand
of more vulnerable actors.
On the other
hand
,
family
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the family
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should be the
one
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who are fully obligated to watch their parents or grandparents.
This
is because they know the elderly more than the
government
, which
lead
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them to possess
moral
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a moral
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obligation to take
care
their
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of their
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family members. It
it
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important to
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that they live for so many years under the same roof, allowing them to build warm and meaningful relations.
Additionally
, even if the older generation
need
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extra
care
, at
one
point in their life they
also
did their duties to take
care
of their child, which means that paying
nursing
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house
acts as a tribute to payback.
As a result
, the
money
from the family will be distributed as a gesture of kindness, as opposed to making it
pressure
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or
burden
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. Assuming that family unable
have
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limited budgets, I would argue that the children can go
hand
in
hand
to collect the
money
to ease the process. In conclusion, the
government
should not be the
one
who
help
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the nursing
house
for the elderly because they contributed the least.
Converserly
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Conversely
, I remain convinced that
family
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families
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should be obligated to finance their older family members
due to
moral responsibilities.
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