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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO²) emissions per person in the United Kingdom , Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007
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The line graph gives information
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avarage
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average
carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2) emission per
perrson
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person
 in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. The units were measured in
tonnes
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Overall
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,
it is clear that
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,
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avarage
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average
carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2) rise in Italy and Portugal.
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, the United Kingdom and Sweden
are
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showed
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the oposite
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oposite rezults
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opposite results
. The Italy data for
carbon
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dioxide
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persons
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person
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 the
incrise
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increase
 between 1967 and 2007. In 1977
carbon
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dioxide
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6
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tonnes
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 in Italy. In 2007 the dominant
the
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figure for
the
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Italy
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carbon
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dioxide
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pperson
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person
nearly
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 8
tonnes
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.
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, In
portugal
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Portugal
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 data for
carbon
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dioxide
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 in 1967
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abaut
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about
 3
tonnes
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, and
by
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in
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 2007
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carbon
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the carbon
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dioxide
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 per person
the
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dramatically
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increase
increased
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neary
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nearly
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tonnes
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 in Portugal.
In contrast
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, the
figur
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figure
figures
 for
United
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the United
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 Kingdom per person
carbon
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dioxide
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 between 1967 and 2007 dramatically decrease.
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,
the
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Sweden
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Sweden's
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 data for
carbon
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dioxide
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 per person from 1967 to 1977 it
growth
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grew
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 sharply
10
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tonnes
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. Bat by 2007 suddenly its figures decline 4
tonnes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • average emissions per person
  • trends
  • reduction
  • increase
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • pivotal years
  • industrial growth
  • policy changes
  • economic changes
  • energy sources
  • technology advancements
  • environmental policies
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