You recently went to a concert and thought one of te singers was very good. You want to tell him hoe you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter - say how you feel about his performance -give details of your musical activities -explain how you would like him to help you with your musical activities

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Dear ZeenKyi, I am a student from the University of Yangon where you had given a show on the 3rd of April. I am writing

this

letter to express my feeling and devotion to you and your art. I have been one of your huge fans and

always

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proud

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been proud

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of your unique talented voice. First of all, the performance was full of excitement, dedication and joy. And your

music

provided positive vibes and peace to the soul. Among them, my favourite was the

last

music

track of that day which was composed about your

music

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journey. Singing is my passion.

Besides

studies, I am fond of learning instruments and

music

. Currently, I am practising guitar and vocal lessons as part of my weekly schedule in order to take part in a solo competition hosted by “The Voice, Myanmar”. You are my idol who has set an example for me that we can achieve our dream with our determination.

Also

, I intend to

sharp

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my skill

further

Therefore

, I would like to request your slight attention in answering my queries regarding

music

through emails so that I can achieve the heights in the contest. Looking forward to learning under your guidance. Yours Sincerely, Ella Khin

Submitted by shooneaindraykhin on Wed Apr 26 2023

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8 paragraphs

204 words

7.50

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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