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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from the home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for government to make it a legal requirement.

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In
this
 contemporary in a millions of waste have been produced from the home every day which is sufficient to recycle from home.
Therefore
, the government should have taken the policy to increase the recycling process. I completely agree with the nation I will regard my agreement point in the upcoming paragraph To commence with, recycling has protected the environment and
introduce
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 the need for refining extraction of the processing
the
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 raw materials which create air and water pollution and that have determined effects on other living creatures. For
an
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instant, when the product is not recycled properly they throw them on the land or in the river which affects biodiversity
as well as
, waterbodies that lead them to some chronic and acute diseases and had
a detrimental effects
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a detrimental effect
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 on their reproductive process.
Furthermore
, the executive should implement rigorous laws for those who
use
 nonrenewable things like plastic
bags
 and restrict that
products
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 destructive to flora and fauna. Nowadays, the dweller
use
 plastic
bags
 exponentially on a daily basis it can be Manuplate if the administration introduces rubbish
bags
 to each family that separate a little and make it have value most as paper boxes are Steel from home cancel to the state and decrease concentrated a particular place for recycling products and high professionals that gives a proper report on a daily basis as it is beneficial for society. In conclusion, both states and individuals participate in recycling
product
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and banned those products that are non-renewable and always
use
 to avoid Polythene number and
use
 rubbish
bags
 in their daily routine.
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