The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010.  Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
This
pie
chart
compares the online
sales
for retail sectors in Canada between 2005 and 2010.
Overall
, Canadians liked to buy electronics and appliances in the
year
2005 the most, they took up 35 per cent (%) in the
pie
chart
.
In contrast
, Canadians would be liked to buy food and beverage online in the
year
2010. The percentage of they were 32%. And the second most popular commodities were home furnishings in 2005, but it only has 15% in 2010. Luckily, video game online
sales
once were 18% in 2005, and they rose to 5% in the years 2010. Its online
sales
percentage rose to 23%.
In addition
, electronics and appliances online
sales
decreased in the
year
2010, but they still took up 30% of the
pie
chart
and are the second most popular goods.
On the other hand
, food and beverage goods' online
sales
had a great increase, it only took up 22% in the
year
2005. But after 5 years, it become the best seller in the
year
2010 which took up 32% of the
pie
chart
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, sales, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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