The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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This

pie

chart

compares the online

sales

for retail sectors in Canada between 2005 and 2010.

Overall

, Canadians liked to buy electronics and appliances in the

year

2005 the most, they took up 35 per cent (%) in the

pie

chart

In contrast

, Canadians would be liked to buy food and beverage online in the

year

2010. The percentage of they were 32%. And the second most popular commodities were home furnishings in 2005, but it only has 15% in 2010. Luckily, video game online

sales

once were 18% in 2005, and they rose to 5% in the years 2010. Its online

sales

percentage rose to 23%.

In addition

, electronics and appliances online

sales

decreased in the

year

2010, but they still took up 30% of the

pie

chart

and are the second most popular goods.

On the other hand

, food and beverage goods' online

sales

had a great increase, it only took up 22% in the

year

2005. But after 5 years, it become the best seller in the

year

2010 which took up 32% of the

pie

chart

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