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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the results of a survey about residents' drinking habits and consumption of
coffee
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 and tea in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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,
Adelaide
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 and
Hobart
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 in Australia in the
last
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 4
weeks
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. It is manifest from the chart that individuals in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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 tend to visit a
coffee
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 shop in the
last
Linking Words
 4
weeks
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 more often than
people
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 who live in
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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. Among them, the café gain the most popularity in
Melbourne
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 and the least popularity in
Adelaide
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, with approximately 63% and 50% of
people
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 going to the café in the
last
Linking Words
 4
weeks
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 respectively.
In addition
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, the purchase rate of both instant and fresh
coffee
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 in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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 is
also
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 higher than that of the rest two countries.
Similarly
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,
people
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 in
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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 tend to buy less fresh
coffee
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 than the other three countries, with 35% in the
last
Linking Words
 4
weeks
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.
In contrast
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, the crowd in these two places has a preference for purchasing instant
coffee
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, with 53% and 50% respectively. The purchase of
coffee
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 in
Hobart
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 showed the same inclinations in these two countries, with almost 55% of
people
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 buying instant
coffee
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 and less than 40% of individuals buying fresh
coffee
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.
Overall
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,
people
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 in
Sydney
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,
Melbourne
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 and
Hobart
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 showed a preference for
coffee
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 and tea more than
people
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 in
Brisbane
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 and
Adelaide
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sydney, melbourne, brisbane, adelaide, hobart, weeks, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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