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In the future,nobody will buy printedpaper or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Newspapers were the major
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 over several decades.On
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popular
 mostly among your generations with the advancement of technology. When we consider
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using online resources, computer literacy and
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 of
internet
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youg
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young
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 will be more
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attracted
 to electronic
books
,magazines, and informative videos.
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using e
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 less expensive compared to printed
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additional space to store them.
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 printed resources are completely
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opposite
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In contrast
,some people,
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 old
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generation
 still prefer to read
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printed
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newspapers
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 rather than
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while
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 of disadvantages
as well as
 they have to pay for it.The reason behind
this
 may be they are more psychologically attracted to them.
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 still there are rural areas all over the world,without internet
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facilities
.Because of that the only way of information they
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 with is non
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electronic
books
 and papers.
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 the
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benefits
 of these,can be used by a person who
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doesn't
 have computer literacy
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 without network connections.The disadvantages are needing space for storage and
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 to pay to buy them. In conclusion,even with several disadvantage lot of people tends to buy printed
materials
due to
 several reasons.In my
opinion
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 the major factor behind
this
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psychologically
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 some are attracted to the feeling of reading printed
materials
 rather than online
as well as
 there are many more reasons behind
this
 as
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 have described above. Because of
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 disagree with the statement "
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 the future,nobody will buy printed papers and
books
.
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