Some people believe computer games are useful for people while others argue that they are waste of time. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People
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have different views about whether they may gain benefits from playing
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games
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or lose their valuable
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. In
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essay, I will discuss both views and give my own opinion.
On the other hand
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, there are a number of
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who believe that
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games
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have a lot of advantages. In the present day, we have several
computer
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games
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and many of these can make better
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's brain functions and increase creativity.
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is because current
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games
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have a lot of stages, and levels which go harder after each one.
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makes
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mind about it and if they failed at any level, they will try more one
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for passing
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this
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help to learn to draw conclusions from their mistakes.
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, these skills can help
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their future life.
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, I support the opinion of those who argue that spending
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on virtual
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is a
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-wasting activity. One of the most important reasons is they can spend
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time
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more productive rather than
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games
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, most of which are useless.
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instance
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game
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which was popular four years ago "
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while
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" which was
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a horrible
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because it included terrible rules , there are many young
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died as an outcome of
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game
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.
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that
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some
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make
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offensive
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is because they failed some steps or stages in the
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. In conclusion,
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some
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reckon that they get a lot of pros from
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games
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, I consider that they are disadvantageous
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some factors.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Strategic thinking
  • Hand-eye coordination
  • Multiplayer interaction
  • Teamwork
  • Educational games
  • Stress relief
  • Mental health
  • Gaming addiction
  • Physical activity
  • Behavioral issues
  • Desensitization
  • Aggressive behavior
  • Time management
  • Eye strain
  • Posture problems
  • Sleep disturbances
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