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In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art (e.g. literature), and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g. physics). Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?

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A wide variation in the choice of
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 is observed nowadays among school-going children. The male group of students are interested in science
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, e.g., physics
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 the female group is inclined to take up art
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 like literature. I believe
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 choice is harmful to society, the result of which is hiking the count of men in comparison to
women
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 in many technology-driven companies. Governments should take up the initiative to minimise
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 gap. To commence, in many rural areas across developing nations,
women
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 are still believed to become homemakers after their marriage. For them, education is merely adding another qualification
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 of securing employment.
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, they are missing out on the biggest fact that a mother's education plays a paramount role in educating a child. I believe every student, irrespective of gender, needs to study
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 like mathematics, physics and biology to ensure they have a holistic development.
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, many girls who decide to choose a career in information technology or production units often feel isolated
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 the considerably larger number of men. A job in these sectors is possible only when they study mathematics, economics or physics at the elementary level.
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, in the twenty-first
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 we can find a minimum number of
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 in leading positions in multinational companies. Girls should be mentored in a manner
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 that they agree to join the workforce
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 lead.
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, during my employment in my previous company, I found it very hard to find any lady staff to interact with and ask for coffee or lunch. There was a severe lack of company.
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, I believe with the aim of
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's empowerment, girls should be motivated to pick up science
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 in schools. They should be directed to emphasise education like boys with the spirit of building a better world to live in.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender roles
  • career paths
  • traditional stereotypes
  • unconscious bias
  • role models
  • learning styles
  • analytical skills
  • inclusive environment
  • gender balance
  • diversifying perspectives
  • socio-cultural norms
  • self-fulfilling prophecy
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