Some people think that the media such as newspaper should be allowed to publish information of people’s private life. Others however, think that there should be controls to stop this media from this kind of information. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In the current age,
although
some
people
believe that publishing private
information
about
people
's lives in different types of media should be authorized,
others
believe
information
should be
unathorized
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unauthorized
.
However
, I think when
people
's
information
be
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accessed
to
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by
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the public that would have a positive impact on
a
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society. On the one hand, humans are addressing their problems more easily when they know other
people
cope
the
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with the
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same situations.
In other words
, if successful
persons
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people
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relased
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released
their
diffeculies
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difficulties
and how they tackle them, that would give the
others
a
gaid
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good
line to follow them to deal with their
issus
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issues
. A prime example of
this
is
biography
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a biography
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story which
show
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shows
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the whole
person
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person's
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life with successful and
fail
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failed
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moments.
Thus
,
this
type of personal
information
empower
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empowers
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others
to be more active and positive in their lives.
On the other hand
, the availability of public
information
about
people
's lives could be a hazard for them.
This
means when
people
prodcaste
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podcast
podcasts
their
information
, that would let them be more exposed to misuse
these
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this information
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information
from
others
.
For example
,
a
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apply
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resent
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recent
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research conducted by
the
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apply
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social scientists at Jordan University, it was
reveled
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revealed
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that students who published their
information
on
the
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apply
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social media
was
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more
abuse
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from
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group
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of hackers.
Hence
, private
information
should not be public and
people
have to be more
knowledgable
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knowledgeable
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and
awareness
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aware
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to secure their
information
. In conclusion, whilst some
people
think that
privecy
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private
information
about
person's
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a person's
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life should be public,
others
think the opposite.
Therefore
, I am
convenced
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convinced
that
publish
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publishing
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details data about
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my personal's
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personal's
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person's
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life is encouraging and stimulating for
others
.
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