The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist in work after five years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie chart illustrates what work graduates of anthropology
of
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a particular University after obtaining their
first degree
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certificate.
While
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the table gives information on the
range
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of salaries of
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anthropologists
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in service for
5years
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5 years
.
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,we can deduce from the pie chart that more than half of the
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work as
full-time
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a full-time
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job
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jobs
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and
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apply
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while
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the least of the graduates combine work and study. We can
also
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see from the table that the
highest paid
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employers were the government workers and
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the lowest
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lowest paid
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lowest-paid
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are those in the private sector.
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with, we could see from the pie chart that
majority
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the majority
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(52%) of
the
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graduate Anthropologist are full-time
employee
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employees
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, followed by
quarter
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a quarter
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of graduates (15%) working part-time jobs.
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,12% of
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this
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experts are jobless and 8% are into conventional postgraduate study and those studying combine with
postgraduate
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the postgraduate
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study have the least proportion of 5%. Moving forward to the table, the data shows that the salary
range
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varies from one sector to the other.Private employees had the highest proportion of
the
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income($25000-40000) and the other two
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with the same ratio of 5%.
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is
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the same
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for the salary
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($50000-74999) with
private
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the private
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sector having
highest
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the highest
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in
this
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category.
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, freelance consultants had the highest fraction
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(40%) in
salary
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a salary
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range
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of ($75000-99999) and
the
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apply
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government workers
has
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have
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the
overall
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percentage(50,%) in people earning over $100000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words range with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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