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Today , many people do not know their neighbors. why is this ? what can be done about this ?

#people #neighbors
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Nowadays ,  a lot of individuals do not know
people
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 living in the same environment as them .
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 is often caused by a very tight schedule and the nature of their job .
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, there are ways of curbing
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 menace and promoting good interpersonal relationships with
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's neighbours.
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 , creating opportunities for social
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 connections and finding time for social gatherings will help alleviate the situation . These will be
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 explained in the coming paragraphs with a logical conclusion .
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 , let's highlight the number
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 cause which is having activities all lined up for each Day. Having so much to do every day makes it difficult to find time to interact with
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's neighbour as there is often less or no leisure time .Turning to a possible solution, social
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 comes to mind as it promotes communication with
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 living far and near . since having activities all lined up makes it difficult for neighbours to interact ,
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 platform makes
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 possible as it only requires having the contact number of
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's neighbour and  their social
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 Handle. For ,example having
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's contact number on WhatsApp can enable you to view their status and have an idea of how they think and things they enjoy doing .
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 ,
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 should ask close by residents for their phone numbers to enable calls to check up and add them to their social
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 forum for easy interaction amongst themselves . Another challenge which makes it difficult for
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 living close by to familiarize themselves is their job patterns .
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 makes it difficult to see , know and talk to
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's acquaintance.
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 sometimes get to leave the house at odd hours
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 their neighbours are still asleep and oftentimes others work from their homes making it difficult to come out of their houses,
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 they cannot identify 
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 living around them. A possible solution to
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 problem is organizing  Social functions as these bring crowds of different diversity and cultures  together and help them have a common interest .
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 promotes unity and bonding among the population living in the same community,
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 they are able to function better .
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 in social association, issues affecting a large sum of a population are discussed , and solutions and a way forward are often given, 
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 brings about a sense of belonging , acceptance and understanding of the personality of the population living around them , including what they like and dislike. 
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 ,
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 is a way forward for  folk living in the same environment to know each other  better . Conclusively , it is difficult but not impossible for
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 living in the same vicinity to know each other and interact . communicating via social
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 forums and organizing social
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 gatherings are beneficial to solve these problems .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community engagement
  • social isolation
  • neighborhood watch
  • local initiatives
  • virtual interaction
  • privacy concerns
  • resident mobility
  • technological advancements
  • social media influence
  • work-life balance
  • busy personal schedules
  • community events
  • local residents
  • social interaction
  • community ties
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