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A pie chart on nature of job by undergraduate anthropologist and chart showing their salary allowance

#nature #job #anthropologist #salary #allowance
The pie chart reveals the nature of work done by
anthropologist
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of
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 a university after the completion of their undergraduate program
while
 the table illustrates their allowance after five years of working.It is measured in percentages
Overall
,it can be seen that most of the graduate are
full
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full-time
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time
workers
 followed by those who are partly employed
while
 those who work and study at the same
time
 has the least segment.For the table,the
government
 sector
workers
 had increasement in allowance
through out
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 the year
while
 private
workers
 experienced fluctuation in their salaries. To start with, the
full
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time
workers
 had a percentage of 52% making it the highest segment on the pie chart, followed by
part
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time
graduate
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graduates
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 and unemployed which recorded 15%and 12% respectively
while
full
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time
workers
 and the unknown had 8%.The
least
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 section of the chart are those who work and study at the same
time
 which recorded 5% Turning to the table which shows details about the salaries,for those that earned more than $100,000 the
government
workers
 recorded 50% which is the highest followed by freelance
consultant
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consultants
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 and private
company
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companies
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 which had 40% and 30%.
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 for allowance between $75,000-$99,999, freelance had the most pay percentage of 40%
while
government
 sector and private
company
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companies
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 had 30% and 25% each.
However
,for
graduate
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graduates
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 that earned between $25,000-$49,999 private
company
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companies
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 had the highest pay percentage of 10%
while
 freelance
consultant
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consultants
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 and
government
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the government
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 sector had the least pay of 5% respectively.
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