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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it.* *Discuss both views and give your opinion.*

#people #attention #*discuss
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people
 believed that advertising is extremely effective at convincing others to patronize things. Most
personperceived
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person perceived
 that advertising is outdated and we don't pay much attention to it.In my own
opinion
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 I strongly agree. Advertising has been helpful in so many ways, in sinking an idea into the consumers' subconscious mind to purchase
a
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merchandise, creating awareness of certain commodities ,and
also
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 the importance of getting the
commodity
 ,thereby creating job opportunities and generating revenue . It's already trending globally in the world,everything denotes sales marketing and desired satisfaction from a
commodity
 .take
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 have a friend in the health sector whose job description was to give adult immunisation, for the fact that he vaccinates individuals doesn't limit him to advertise ,he health educate them about the vaccine's effectiveness and imperative of being vaccinated.all
this
 process will not only yield health promotion or prevention of diseases but will appraise profit making for the organizations.
On the contrary
 ,most
people
 perceived that advertising is outdated and we don't pay much attention to it. Truly, considering the fact that too most
people
 are already in the bid of doing sales marketing in all sectors. Makes it tiring for
people
 to get genuine goods. Because there is a tendency of purchasing a fake
commodity
 as much , every person
want
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 to advertise their
commodity
 but making profits is aimed , so they are not bothered about customers satisfaction. Thereby making the individuals fall victim to acquiring the wrong goods and services and making individuals uninterested . In conclusion, it's argued that advertisements have a role in sinking ideas of the subconscious mind of every person to purchase goods but too many
person
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 had made it uninteresting to get
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 desired utility from
such
 services.
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