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The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012

The table below gives information about the population of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012
The table illustrates the number of
people
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 in their
age
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 groups in New Zealand between 2011 and 2012.
Overall
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, it can be seen that in the given
years
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age
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 group 16 to 39 is the highest
whereas
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people
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 over 64
years
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 had the lowest
population
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.
To begin
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,  the total number of
people
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 in 2011 increased to 4,460.000 in 2012 which shows that there is an increase in
population
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.
However
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, in 2011
people
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 under 15 had the number 801.750 and a little decreased to 800.000 in 2012 with a percentage change of -0.2 followed by
people
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 in the 16 to 39
age
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 group  of 1520.000 which is the highest
population
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 but had a slight decrease to 1500.000 .
Furthermore
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,
people
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 in the
age
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 group 40 to 64 had 1400.000 which increase to 1460.000 in 2012 with a percentage change of +0.6. Meanwhile,
people
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 over 65
years
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 had the lowest
population
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 in the given
years
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 and a significant increase to 900.000 with a percentage change of +4.0.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, age, years, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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