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The most important function of music that it helps people reduce stress. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Task 2 It has been realised that the fundamental use of
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 is its ability in reducing people's
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.
Music
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 is
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 of the oldest phenomena in the history of man. Lots of investigations over the years concerning
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 topic and
one
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 of the vital benefits is that it has been observed to lower
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. I agree with
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 opinion because when an individual listens to
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, the lyrics in the song can divert
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's attention and
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 playing the instruments relaxed the nerves. In
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 essay, I agree that
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 reduces
stress
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 with the help of relevant examples and a logical conclusion. When listening to
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, the lyrics in the song have a way of casting people's minds to something else either in the abstract. For ,example people listen to love songs, the lyrics
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 some individuals make you remember when you first loved or you could remember when you first met that special person that brings a smile to your face and distract your mind from the stressor at that point in time.
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, listening to
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 calms the nerves, relaxes the muscles and reduces
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. In recent years, research has shown that
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 of the ways of counteracting
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 is by listening to
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 through vocals or instruments.
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, in some ,cases
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 can rather become a stressor
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 of a
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 antagonist.
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 in some parts of Nigeria where the best way of listening to
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 is by tuning the volume to be very.
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 of course disturbs the peace of the mind and the serenity of the environment. In conclusion,
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 is a very important option for managing
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 but it can
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 be a major factor of
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 when it is wrongly used.
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