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There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

Nowadays
education
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 has become available
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people
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 than ever before.
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 some
people
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 argue that the
growth
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number
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 of
students
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 in universities
have
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 a negative impact on
education
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.
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 and advantages of universities.
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education
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 is very important in life, some
people
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 believe that many
students
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 in
one
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 institution are not
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 a good influence on
education
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.
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, there are many
people
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 in the same class and only
one
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 teacher may not be able to cope with his work, thereby it will be bad to explain and the
students
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 will not be able to
study
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 normally.
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,
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, it is necessary that a decent
number
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 of
students
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study
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 at the educational institution It is often said that
education
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 is the best legacy
one
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 can have.
One
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 of the major gains of increasing numbers of
student
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students
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 studying in universities is
acquisition
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the acquisition
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 of knowledge.
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 is so because when
one
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 is knowledgeable, the skills acquired can be translated to making significant developments in the areas of
study
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 of the individual which can be beneficial to the immediate community and the nation at large.
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 everyone who
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study
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 and can work, in the future
live
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best
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 life ever in conclusion, training has a large part of the positive effect, but still sometimes the
number
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 is large and
education
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 becomes worse, it is worth reducing the
number
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 of
students
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 in an educational institution.
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, the inadequate facilities to accommodate the growing numbers of undergraduates could impair the quality of knowledge gained.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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