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Goverments should make people responsible for looking after their own local environment. Do you agree or disagree?

#goverments #people #environment
In the modern world, everyone needs to think of
nature
 and the government needs to support it. So, in my opinion, I agree with governments would let humans take care of
nature
 in their area. And
this
 essay, I will discuss the benefits of governments supporting people to take care of their
environment
. The first idea that comes to mind is people need to take care of their
nature
 because
nature
 is very important to us
for example
, we drink water every day and we need clean water for our health.
Secondly
, the
environment
 is very important in every place and every place needs to have a good
environment
 because a good
environment
 is good for life.
On the other hand
,
To sum up
,
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