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The chart shows Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Anthropologists in work after five years

The chart shows Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the Anthropologists in work after five years
#anthropology #graduates #university #course #salaries #anthropologists #work #five #years
The pie chart
illustrate
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 the
percentage
 of anthropology
graduates
 from one university
did
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apply
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after finishing their undergraduate degree course.
However
, the table
highlight
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 the
salary
 of the
anthropology
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anthropologists
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in
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work
 after five years.
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, most
percentage
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 of
graduates
 are doing full -
time
 was by least amount of gadgets doing part -0time
work
 with postgraduate study.
Salary
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 of
graduate
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graduates
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 from
government
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the government
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 sector is high. Ask can
be see
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 from the chat, 52
percentage
graduate
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graduates
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 are doing
full -
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full-time
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time
job
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jobs
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. 12
percentage
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 and 15 % of
graduates
 are unemployed and doing
part-
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part-time
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time
work
 respectively. 18% of
graduates
 doing
full
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full-time
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time
 postgraduate study.
In
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remaining
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the remaining
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percentage
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, 5% are doing
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part-time
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part
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part-time
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time
work
 + postgraduate study,
while
 8% is have As can
be see
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 from the table, 5
percentage
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per cent
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 of Reliance Council and garment sector get $ 25,000-49000 amount as
salary
 after 5 years of
work
. Private company
salary
 is 5% is more than
government
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 sector
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 91%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, graduates, salary, work, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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