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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions.

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Introduction
Whether maintaining public
libraries
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 is a waste of money is a topic of discussion. The given topic
inform
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 that
computer
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 technology can replace the functions of
libraries
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. In the following paragraphs, the reason why I disagree with
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 idea will be explained.
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From the views of
people
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 who agree with
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 topic, it is
waste
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a waste
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 of money, because
libraries
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 need
human
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humans
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 to
maintenance
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, and
libraries
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 have to pay
salary
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 to them. On top of that,
computer
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 technology can replace
libraries
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’ functions. To illustrate,
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computer
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computers
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 can store
information
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 more than
libraries
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, and many books have an
e-books
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 version, so
people
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 can read them through the internet.
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, using
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computer
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a computer
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 is saving time.
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 means that
information
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 can be searched anywhere.
Body · 2
However
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, other
people
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, including me, agree that maintaining public
libraries
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 is important.
Libraries
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 are accessible
for
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 anyone.
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, old
people
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, someone who can’t afford
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computer
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, and someone who
live
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 in
the
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a
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 place
that
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 internet can’t access.
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,
information
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 from
book
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books
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 is more reliable than
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computer
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computers
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.
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because
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is because
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information
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 on the internet can be written by anyone, different from
book
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a book
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, which is going through many
reseach
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research
 to complete.
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, the atmosphere of
libraries
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 is better than other places. Neither home nor bedroom is a good place to read a book, it is not effective enough. 
Conclusion
In conclusion, both of the views inform the different
opinion
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.
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, the reason why I disagree with the idea
because
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 I believe that public
libraries
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 should be maintained. Even though it costs
lot
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 of money to
maintenance
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, it is necessary and important for many
people
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repositories of books
  • promoting literacy
  • community engagement
  • equal access to information
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
  • personalized assistance
  • educational programs
  • cultural events
  • safe spaces
  • community meetings
  • tactile experience
  • preserving historical documents
  • important cultural repositories
  • fostering a sense of community
  • communal hubs
  • serene and focused environment
  • conducive to study and reflection
  • irreplaceable value
  • distracted environment
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