There have been some problems with the bus servicing, especially its reliability, in your area over the last two weeks. Write a letter to the manager of the bus company, in your letter: Describe what the problems are Explain how these problems are affecting you Suggest what you would like the company to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring your attention
some
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problems with the
bus
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servicing,
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, reliability, in my area for the
last
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two weeks. My name is Milav and I live in Sector Number 2A. To commence with, the people from my area and I have been suffering a couple of problems with your
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servicing.
Firstly
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, for the
last
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couple of weeks, buses did not arrive regularly in our area during office time.
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, if by chance they
came
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arrive on time,
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bus
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conductors are behaving very rudely to us and they are not giving
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of
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money to us.
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these services, we all are facing a number of problems. First of all, we all are reaching late at our company and we tend to seat late in the office to complete our office hours.
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, we do not spend much time with our family. Another problem is that sometimes we lost our
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and are
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loss
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in money. I would like to request you to change
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conductors as soon as possible and update your
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service as per modern technology
,
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so that we
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reliable in your services. I hope you understand our concerns and look
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into the matter. I look forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Milav Soni
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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