Nowadays modern gadgets are widely used by young people and the use of these products reduces their creativity. Do you agree or disagree?

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modern era technology become an important part of our daily life. That's why our youngsters are more
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useful for our daily routine but it
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lazy. To explain it,
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our juveniles use computers and mobiles for their work and study but on the
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hand, whenever they have free
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they spend it on mobile and computer
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playing online games.
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of activities reduce their creativity.
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our knowledge but it
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our creativity.to elaborate
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,if we spend our most of
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is social and creative things we can be more intelligent and with our creative abilities we can make
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world a more accurate place to live. Our
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can participate in the progress of our coming nation.
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technology become a crucial part of our life
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our juvenile should spend their most of
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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