Goverments should make people responsible for looking after their own local environment. Do you agree or disagree?

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The damage being caused to our
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is drastically increasing over the
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, and it is being talked about
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various platforms, but it seems that nothing is progressing towards an improvement. One solution for
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issue
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is if
governments
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will force
people
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to be in charge
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their environment. In
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I will explain why I strongly believe, that
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solution, outstands all other solutions, and will probably have a greater impact. Applying laws that will deter
people
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from
distorying
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destroying
distorting
their
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environment
, and
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, can cause them to be more aware
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their actions and protect their
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environment
, is a tool with a great effect. Enforcing
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to follow the rules usually results
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positive outcomes.
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, In Australia, there are fines for
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who
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recycle their rubbish
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or
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chop their grass. Unlike other countries, there, most
people
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are
obbeying
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obeying
lobbying
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rules, and those who do not
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will be fined with the amount of 5,000$.If
governments
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will follow Australia as an example, and declare
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punishments
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as fines or even sitting in jail for
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environmental
penalties, maybe
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will have a deeper effect on
people
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who will be more respectful and responsible towards where they live.
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, in my opinion,
governments
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can unite globally with other
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and implements
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environmental
rules
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a large scale, that will enforce a vast population to take
respobibility
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responsibility
towards the
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enviornment
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environment
, and by that, create an enormous impact on the entire world, rather than individuals, or small groups organizations, that try to make a change, but
unfortunately
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this
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change is small and locally. Undoubtedly, without applying force, and punishments, the individual will not be able to create a change that will matter. In conclusion,
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Environmental
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destruction happens all over the world, and
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believe that
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should be issued globally. I agree that together,
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can create a joint effort to fight
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phenomenon, and hopefully, to help our world to become a better place again.
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