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The charts below show the information about a US bus company between 1999 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the information about a US bus company between 1999 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graphs present data about the performance of a particular bus company, with regard to its buses arriving on time, and how many
complaints
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 were made by passengers in five succeeding years.
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, the
target
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rate
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 of buses arriving on time declined each
year
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, and that of the actual fluctuated but generally exceeded the
target
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rate
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. Meanwhile, the number of
complaints
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 from passengers increased with some fluctuations in those years. In 1999, about 82% of buses arrived on time, and
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 was about 2% higher than the
target
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 figure.
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, the percentage of actual busses arriving punctually fell to around 30% after a
year
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 which is about 10% lower than
the
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expected.
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 figure rose again by about 12% in 2001 which was similar to that in 2002, whereby the expected
rate
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 was moderately lower than the actual by about 2%.
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,
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rate
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 went up to just under 80% by 2003 which is more than two times higher than the
target
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 proportion. Meanwhile, in the initial
year
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, the number of
complaints
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 made by passengers was about 60, and it jumped to about 90 after a
year
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 before experiencing a slight decrease in 2001. Later, the figure went up steadily, recording around 120
complaints
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 in
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 bus company in 2003.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words complaints, target, rate, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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